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Post by Lord Eorr on Jul 26, 2015 23:12:32 GMT -8
Thank you! I'm sure it's obvious to tell English wasn't the best subject in school for me  and as for why I had two Ad boards I've been working on the site on and off for a while now so I may of just forgotten about already having an ad board and made another. Went ahead and made that fix right away as well as the Holonet one. If you find you have the time to critique the entire plot that would help me out tremendously. Mixed again thank you for taking the time to critique my site  |
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Post by Mixed on Jul 27, 2015 1:27:31 GMT -8
Adding the description really helps. It's a good step in the right direction for sure. One Ad board is much better. I also like how you broke it up. For the plot, I just sent you a private message with your plot. I marked it for a first revision. Of course, everything can always be better, but at least this is a start. Also, those marked points are only suggestions and you don't NEED to take them. A different note: Do you need SO many sub-boards in the "Outer Rim" board? That seems like a lot for now and it would be an easy place to add places back. I would probably pick your favorites or the "closest" to the main area in distance for now. I hope this helps. And you are welcome, Lord Eorr! |
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Post by Lord Eorr on Jul 27, 2015 15:23:26 GMT -8
I looked at the Outer Rim and a lot of those planets may be used but maybe a little farther down the line so currently they have been hidden also bump |
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Post by Mixed on Jul 27, 2015 21:58:32 GMT -8
It looks much more manageable now for a new forum. And now you have boards you can easily add! Again, good luck! |
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Post by Lord Eorr on Sept 16, 2015 7:34:48 GMT -8
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and as for why I had two Ad boards I've been working on the site on and off for a while now so I may of just forgotten about already having an ad board and made another. Went ahead and made that fix right away as well as the Holonet one. If you find you have the time to critique the entire plot that would help me out tremendously. 
