Crime and Crime Again

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sweet!

[Andrew Workman]

niesse said:

namkrowa said:

Keep in mind this is just part of the chapter. If you read the end, Bryan's in the shower. I'm going to go into a few pages soley on him, his life, what he's doing at the time, then have him go downstairs before anything else. There's going to be a triffle with his mum, which will explain the whole "my mom is mean" situation.

Thanks for the comments.

I'd recommend against doing several pages just describing Bryan, his life, and whatnot. I find that such is always a quagmire to read through--you have to make people interested in the character before you go into great detail about 'im. It's sort of like having a complete stranger walking up to you, and giving you his life story. ^_^

Oh, of course, I'm going to be putting in little tiny details, introducting Bryan to you all before I go into that all. There's going to be a couple of revealing things in the bathroom (not like that! ), then we'll move onto the bedroom. I'll be getting into Bryan's story slowly but surley.

dvree said:

sweet!

I take it you like. ^_^